My only problem is that it is a very short song. Just when I start enjoying it, it comes to the end. I always thought it needed another verse...to expand on the themes, for balance, for pacing and just to extend the wonderful melody and harmonies.
So, I wrote one. Hope you like it...
Out of My Head
by Fastball
on All the Pain Money Can Buy (1999)
Original Lyrics:
Sometimes I feel
Like I am drunk behind the wheel The wheel of possibilities However it may roll
Give it a spin
See if you can somehow factor in You know there's always more than one way To say exactly what you mean to say Chorus: Was I out of my head? Was I out of my mind? How could I have ever been so blind? I was waiting for an indication It was hard to find.
No matter what I say only what I do
I never mean to do bad things to you So quiet but I finally woke up If you're sad then its time you spoke up, too.
(Chorus repeats)
**But if it didn’t…and there was another verse
…what would that verse be before the chorus repeated?
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Lost Verse Written
May 3, 2012
So passed the years,
filled with comfort, bitterness and tears. We scratched and clawed to stay afloat surrounded by our fears. Laughter and joy; Wisdom known by every girl and boy. We stand here naked;
judged uniquely
Mistakes we cling to;
the only truth we know.
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Or...from July 27,
2005:
So passed the years, filled throughout with far too many tears. We scratched and clawed to stay afloat when ever winds would blow. Laughter and joy; Wisdom felt by every girl and boy. We stand here naked;
judged uniquely
Mistakes we cling to;
the only truth we know.
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